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我写了一篇英语作文,想让大家看看有没有什么毛病。请各位高手赐教!

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My Happy Holiday
During Workers’ Day, I was very happy. Because I could do anything I want.
The first day, I watched TV. Then, I played with my classmates .We talked about this holiday and laughed. We were very happy. In the noon, I had lunch and went to bed. Later, I did my homework. After supper, I played with my friends.
The second day, we played badminton. We were hot and happy. After breakfast, I did my homework. Then, I listened to the music and played computer games.
The third day, mom and I visited my grandmother and grandfather. And I helped them to do some housework. My uncle, aunt, brother and I went to work on the farm. We put the beans in the ground. It was not an easy job. I felt tired, but very happy. And I ate much food for lunch. In the afternoon, I went back home. Then, I shopped with my mom. My mother bought a watch for me. Mom, thank you! I like it very much!
Then, I needed the whole day to do my homework.
The fifth day, I watched TV and played games.
This holiday was very happy! I had a wonderful time! I liked my happy holiday!
问题补充  2009-05-03 11:59
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匿名 回答:1 人气:1 解决时间:2009-05-03 13:44
满意答案
laughed用词不当
“I had lunch and went to bed. ”应该不用“went to bed”,用“午睡”的那个词组
“We were hot and happy”是“We felt hot""hot"时形容词,不能直接用在主语之后
“on the farm”是"in"吧
“in the ground”是“on ”吧
总体来说,文章写得太长了,不需要吧每天的事一件一件列出来,像流水帐
提问人的追问   2009-05-03 12:18
为什么laughed用词不当?We were hot= We felt hot
farm用on,这是固定搭配。
in the ground 用in 是正确的。
老师让我们必须写够200词,不一件件列出来不够字数。
谢谢你!
回答人的补充   2009-05-03 12:27
laughed意思常用为嘲笑,表客观上的行为,主观情绪不应用laughed
回答采纳率:9.7% 2009-05-03 12:06
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